It's a Small World After All

posted 28 Dec 2010 11:00 pm

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28 Dec 2010 10:20 pm

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Gavin and Maria, once again so close to the truth, and yet so far. Rain’s compelling response to Gavin’s question (ie. - running the hell away) has helped to keep her secret safe for the time being, but was that really the best move?

I have to be honest. I’m not crazy about this page. Looking back, I think I could’ve probably condensed this page and the last page into one to make things move along a little quicker. But then I’d have had less time to establish foreshadowing for Maria in the last page, and Rain’s fear of discovery on this page. Okay, so maybe condensing isn’t quite what I’m looking for, but I still feel like I could have done better with these two pages.

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Rain, all characters and all other aspects of the story are copyright material belonging to me.

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29 Dec 2010 09:57 am

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Merry Christmas (delayed, i know) and Happy New Year!

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