It's a Small World After All

posted December 28th, 2010, 11:00 pm

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December 28th, 2010, 10:20 pm

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Gavin and Maria, once again so close to the truth, and yet so far. Rain’s compelling response to Gavin’s question (ie. - running the hell away) has helped to keep her secret safe for the time being, but was that really the best move?

I have to be honest. I’m not crazy about this page. Looking back, I think I could’ve probably condensed this page and the last page into one to make things move along a little quicker. But then I’d have had less time to establish foreshadowing for Maria in the last page, and Rain’s fear of discovery on this page. Okay, so maybe condensing isn’t quite what I’m looking for, but I still feel like I could have done better with these two pages.

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December 29th, 2010, 9:57 am

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Merry Christmas (delayed, i know) and Happy New Year!

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