Gavin

posted January 6th, 2011, 11:00 pm


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January 6th, 2011, 9:22 pm

LittleLynn84

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Now that I look at it, I wonder if this page was even necessary. I feel like all it really did was draw things out just a wee bit longer. Well, I guess it helps establish that Rudy’s not a complete jerk… hopefully…

I ended up changing the dialogue on this one a few times too. Maria’s final line, in particular, originally stated that she thought Gavin was being “emo” because “on the off-hand chance Rudy was right about Rain, he’d owe her ever more money.” As amusing as I thought that was, Maria did technically deny that bet. Plus, no matter how I worded it, it just never felt natural. So while a little funny, I don’t think I really liked the line at all. “I hope she slaps him” though, seems fitting to me… and is potentially still kinda funny.

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Rain, all characters and all other aspects of the story are copyright material belonging to me.

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January 6th, 2011, 11:32 pm

Teku_| (Guest)

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It is, but Rain's a shy girl.
Any girl (unless they're in the same situation than Rain) would just blush and say no before leaving again.

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January 6th, 2011, 11:52 pm

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"I hope she slaps him"
I think I'm in love! :P

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January 7th, 2011, 4:18 am

Schorhr

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Hehe. I like how this page turned out, no worries.
A nice comic. And the suspense is killing me! :-)

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