Hi, Mom...

posted April 17th, 2019, 10:02 am


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April 17th, 2019, 10:02 am

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So, last we saw Emily, she stepped out into the lobby and take a call. It turns out it's her mother, who's been away for months at this point. Though we never hear the mother's side of the conversation, we get an idea of what she's saying to Emily by her reactions (assuming I did well enough writing Emily's side, I guess).

I actually did write her mom's lines. I ended up removing them partly to make it flow better (and less cluttered). But also, there's something more ominous that we've never seen this woman and don't even get to hear her. I don't think I'll ever change that either. We never see her in person, but we definitely feel the effects of what she does. The dialogue itself is also layed out in a labyrinthine way to make the page look overwhelming/stressful. We're watching only Emily's side of the conversation, and I wanted to really highlight her struggle to keep up with her mother by being "all over the place".

There's a couple very particular lines I want to address too. First of all, Chase getting arrested after he attacked someone, and Blair being there to see it. When did that happen? It was actually from one of the bonus chapters in Volume 5. I didn't think it was so important that it had to be part of the main story, but it's probably worth knowing about. But this also explains Blair's long, crazy story of how he learned Emily's pregnant, if you remember. I can flesh that out a bit later for non book buyers too.

There's also a moment when Emily almost comes out. She wants to brave and stand up to her mom, but whether it's something specific her mom says, or just the general attitude, Emily backs off, never getting further than mentioning "her gir-". Emily also reluctantly agrees to move back home, so maybe her mom is sticking around for a while this time. But it feels less than ideal...

I realize there's a lot to take in here, but I'm very interested in hearing your thoughts.


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April 17th, 2019, 10:18 am

DXMarina (Guest)

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Why am I getting the feeling that a large amount of stuff is about to go horribly wrong all at the same time on this prom night?

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April 17th, 2019, 6:22 pm

Kalciphoz (Guest)

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@DXMarina: Because that's just how proms work?

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April 17th, 2019, 10:27 am

Jazmin (Guest)

Brilliant page!

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This page felt like a hard yank of a turnabout after the hopeful pages with Rudy but gosh does it work perfectly. We are cut off from the bubbling atmosphere of prom, the joyfulness, just like Emily is cutting herself off for the call...

And the one sided, meandering conversation is just so well done! such a sense of the other end, without ever hearing it, and the anxiety spiraling as it unwinds, Emily's lines getting shorter and shorter as she gives in to the pressure from the absent mother she used to care so much about...now looming on the edge of her new life like a thundercloud. We dont even need to see her face to hear her expressions...

A masterful page, even if it is a downer, thank you for it!

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April 17th, 2019, 9:08 pm

CatPerson

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@Jazmin:

Seconded!

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April 17th, 2019, 11:05 am

Gabi (Guest)

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That was a great effect you got with the layout of this page! And showing Emily's side of the conversation.

I can't help but wonder what her mother wants... Why did she disappear like that without a word to her daughter... and now suddenly comes back and wants to know about her life? I wonder if anything big happened to her.

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April 17th, 2019, 11:27 am

TallMist

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Emily, noooooo. Don't go back to her. Go back to Rain. Your mom doesn't deserve you.

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April 17th, 2019, 11:34 am

TranshumanAr (Guest)

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Emily's mother reminds me of White Diamond with being all ominous, persuasive and not listening to what her daughter has to say. What did she told her daughter to persuade her to return home against her will? Did she threatened Emily? Did she threatened her loved ones? Does she want Emily to give away the baby?!

Also, good ridance of Chase! That is the only good news so far... and won't probably know more about Emily for a while with the way updates go... I made myself sad.

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April 17th, 2019, 5:14 pm

IXman

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This Page:
I really like the touch of not hearing her mother's side of the conversation and I don't know if that was the intent but it makes her feel less like a person and more like a force.
The Future:
Now I just fear her mother doing something in the vain of Kellen but much worse, I also really hope Emily can get the courage to run. But will see!

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April 18th, 2019, 1:59 am

TranshumanAr (Guest)

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@IXman:
The dread intensifies!

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April 17th, 2019, 8:36 pm

Fairportfan

DON'T

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April 17th, 2019, 9:10 pm

Trassa

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Nonononononono

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April 18th, 2019, 3:36 am

Illy (Guest)

Oh gods, no!

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I really, really hope she has the sense to have Rain come with her, And Fara, and then not sleep there.

Assault is bad for the baby.

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April 18th, 2019, 6:41 pm

Tina (Guest)

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Oh man..... I really love this comic, but this page shouldn't have been pure text. We were robbed of Emily's struggle visually. Feels a bit cheap ngl, and I know you're better than this

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April 19th, 2019, 9:28 am

Jazmin (Guest)

couldn't disagree more

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@Tina: I am gonna have to disagree with you there friend, and invite you to consider a number of points:

first, a third of the page is visual, and its the lead in, without any words we get a ton of her struggle: she glances towards the others, seperation, isolation, worry. She closes her eyes and sighs, resigned, giving in, mentally preparing herself then she answers, dramatic reveal of the ID of the caller, AND we loose sight of her face, Emily has closed herself off, dissapearing behind her shielded personality.

Then the conversation, I have already talked about the writing above, but i wanna reiterate some of the effects of Hiding her face...first of all, it puts us BEHIND her eyes, instead of making us an observer, it is as if we are a participant. second it places us on the receiving end of the conversation, we can hear her voice as it changes, rises and falls, strains, and finally succumbs. we are left to infer the other voice, making it all the more alien and menacing that words, or a clear face, could ever be.

Instead the only visual we get is the background, while this may seem (and indeed be) an 'easier' choice, it is also a deliberate one, and effective. emily has no one to look for for comfort here, just a wall. she is cut off from the world, she is even in a way, still cut off from her mom, lacking the cathasis of face to face confrontation, we also get the gradient, the fade from grey...to black. the leeching of color from the previous pages full of bright dresses and vibrant ties, has been replaced by this cold...and increasingly sombre and menacing backdrop, its a slam of contrast that leaves us realing, just as it must leave emily.

so when you say you expect better, I think you might be saying more elaborate drawing could be done, but in terms of better communicating her emotion, and the situation she is being put through, I think you may be vastly underestimating the power of this page, I for one, have trouble imagining one that could better deliver this punch.

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